NARUTO: Explosion Series

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Character sheet
Name: Kazuki Namaki
Affiliation: Konohagakure
Rank: Hachidaime Hokage

PostSubject: Kazuki Namaki   Thu Jul 15, 2010 4:07 pm

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Personal Information

Birthdate:Oct,30

Birthsign:Scorpio

Name:Kazuki Namaki


Nickname:Kazu

Personality:Although he is usually seen as a laid-back, jovial fellow, Kazuki also shows a deceptively-different, cunning, and serious side of his personality when the situation demands for it. He commonly uses idle conversation and outward concern as an act to distract his opponents from his true intentions.[2] Despite his care-free attitude, he always speaks politely, but is sometimes sarcastic


Likes:
Watching clouds
Eating
Training


Dislikes:Bad food
Doing work


Physical Information

Gender:Male

Age:24

Height:6'0

Weight: (In lbs - this is optional.)

Hair Color:Brown

Eye Color:Black

General Appearance:Kazuki has white hair kinda like's sauske but a lil bit longer.Kazuki wears his headban over his neck.Kazuki wears a white T-shirt and some blue jeans. his eyes are brown and he wears shinobi boot's.He also wears black fingerless Konoha gloves.He also carry's a sword and has a tatto on his left arm


Clan Information

Clan:Namaki


Kekke Genkai/Hiden:Wood Release

Head of the Household:N/A

Social Information

Family:

Friends:N/A

Ninja Status

Affiliation:Leaf

Ninja Registration:905536

Rank:HoKage

Class:S

Academy Graduation Age:12

Chunin Promotion Age:14
Chakra Information

Nature:Fire,Earth

Specialization:NinTaijutsu

Jutsu
Name: Katon: Gōkakyū no Jutsu (Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique )
Rank: Chuunin
Element: Fire
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: The user performs handseals. A technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire, and expelled from the mouth in a massive orb of roaring flame. The scope of the attack is altered by controlling the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released flames will engulf their target, and leave a crater on the ground's surface. The fireball is normally blown through a ring made by the thumb and index finger of the user.

Name:Muon Satsujin Jutsu("Silent Homicide Technique")
Rank:B
Element:N/A
Description:This technique utilizes Muon Kutsuoto in conjunction with the user's skills to move with quickly with the utmost of silence, focusing chakra throughout the user's body to mute the sound of shifting clothing, clattering weapons, and any other small sounds that would otherwise cause detection. A technique that is generally only learned by ANBU due to its difficulty.
Limitations:Once every other post

Name:Earth Barrier • Earth Dome Prison
Rank:B
Element:Earth
Description:Dorou Doumu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After striking the ground with his hands, Jiroubou is able to overturn the earth and cause it to rise up around his opponents. Placing his hands against the dome he is able to suck out the chakra from the people trapped inside and bring it into his own body. At the same time Jiroubou will use his own chakra to spread throughout the dome, this allows him to repair any damage his opponents manage to inflict on the inside. The chakra is not evenly spread out though, as the chakra flows away from Jiroubou, it becomes more and more weak. Allowing the dome to be broken on the far side if hit by a hard enough force
Limitations:2 everythrea and it last 4 post

Name: Katon: Ryūka no Jutsu (Fire Style: Dragon Flame Jutsu)
Rank: Chuunin
Element: Fire
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: The user performs handseals. The user breathes fire along a cord or any other type of long object, which rush forward in straight line catching the enemy on fire. The flames are meant to target, and assault the enemy's upper body just like a projectile weapon.

Name:Doryuu Heki - Earth Style Wall
Rank:B
Element:Earth
Description:Doryuu Heki is a defensive Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will do the necessary hand seals and then spew a line of mud onto the ground. The mud will then grow into a large mud wall to help defend against incoming attack.Kakashi will use the jutsu by placing his hands on the ground. This causes an earthen wall marked by canine heads to rise.
Limitaions:Can be used every 6 post and cant be used for another 12 It last 3 post

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Replacement Technique)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short 0-5m
Rank: E
Description:
This jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack. Explosive tags can be attached to the replacement for an added surprise, which Sasuke has done twice in the anime. Fundamentally, all ninja know this technique.
The anime has a number of other objects being used for this jutsu, such as a boulder, mud, a scarecrow, and even a large rolled-up carpet. These items are usually nowhere in sight, suggesting that they are merely gags meant to lighten up the situation and not an actual part of the jutsu. Additionally, the normal practice of switching places with a section of log is done in several places that have no such thing anywhere nearby.
This technique is sometimes referred to as the Art of Projection ("Utsusemi no Jutsu") in other manga and anime series.

Name: Kakuremino no Jutsu (Cloak of Invisibility Technique)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short 0-5m
Rank: E
Description:
This jutsu allows a ninja to take a cloak or a piece of cloth and blend into an object, making them invisible. Konohamaru uses this technique constantly in the beginning of the Naruto series to try and fool Naruto Uzumaki, but uses poor disguises (square rocks with eyeholes, cloaks that are incorrectly patterned or the wrong way round, or simply not covering himself completely), thus betraying the illusion. In the anime, Naruto has been somewhat practical at using this jutsu a couple of times.


Name: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short 0-5m
Rank: E
Description:
This jutsu allows the user to assume the appearance of another person, animal, or object. This is one of the basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Fundamentally, all ninja know this jutsu.

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu (Body Flicker Technique)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short to Mid 0-10m
Rank: D
Description:
This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily boost the user's reflexes. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance between the user and their intended destination. Shisui Uchiha, one of the most talented Uchiha, was feared as "Shisui of the Body Flicker" ("Shunshin no Shisui"), likely referring to this technique.
The Body Flicker technique has various variations among the different hidden villages, all of which involve some extra element aside from the movement itself. The extra element is usually some sort of substance used to distract the opponent, such as leaves or sand. Gaara, for instance, uses the "Sand Body Flicker" (Suna-Shunshin), which uses sand to cover his movements. Other varieties include the "Mist Body Flicker" (Kiri-Shunshin), "Water Body Flicker" (Mizu-Shunshin), and "Leaf Body Flicker" (Konoha-Shunshin).


Name: Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Shadow Clone Technique)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short 0-5m
Rank: A
Description:
Similar to the Clone Technique, this jutsu creates clones of the user. Unlike the Clone Technique, these clones are actual copies, not illusions. The user's chakra is evenly distributed among every clone, giving each clone an equal fraction of the user's overall power. The clones are capable of performing jutsu on their own and can even bleed, but will usually disperse after one or two solid blows. Unlike other clones, they can't be detected by the Byakugan because the clones have the exact same amount of chakra and aren't made from any other substance, making them indistinguishable from the actual person. Sasuke Uchiha claims that the Sharingan can tell the difference during his battle with Naruto at the Valley of the End.
Any experience the clones gain during their existence is transferred to the user once they are dispersed. This makes the technique ideal for spying, since the user can simply send a clone to spy on a target, then have the clone disperse itself without returning to pass the information back to the user. It's also useful for training purposes, since the total amount of experience the user gains is multiplied by the total number of clones being used to train. Using it in this manner is far more difficult, however, since a large number of clones are needed to make a significant difference in the training time. It's unclear if other types of clones possess this advantage.
This technique is considered dangerous because of the manner in which the clones are created. Because the user divides their chakra among the clones, the user could potentially use up all their chakra fairly quickly if the user is low on chakra or makes too many clones, such as Naruto does with Multiple Shadow Clone Technique, this jutsu's enhanced (and forbidden) form. Naruto is able to use this technique to the extremes that he does because of his tailed beast, the nine-tailed demon fox, which gives him an abnormally high chakra level. Even without the demon fox's chakra, Naruto can make quite a few clones, but nowhere near on the level he can when he has access to the demon fox's chakra. The technique can also be dangerous if the user is injured or has some otherwise debilitating physical condition at the time of the cloning, since all of the clones will be created in roughly the same state.
Limitations:15 can be used everythread and they last Two thread a peice



11.)
Type: Ninjutsu
Nature: --
Rank: A
Class: Offensive, Supplementary
Name: Shuriken Shadow Clone Technique
Description: The user creates a thousand shadow clones from one shuriken, striking down the enemy. This is a technique that combines ninja tools with ninjutsu. Compared to normal shadow clones, clones of material objects are said to be on a far higher level. There is no need for preparations beforehand, like stocking up on shuriken, yet since the shadow clones are real and not illusions, all the shadow blades that fly around are equally lethal. Because the clones form in just an instant, completely evading them is next to impossible. As a technique invented by the Third Hokage, its conceptualization and efficiency can certainly be said to be unique to the "Professor".
Limitations: This technique can be used after a 2-post cooldown. A master of this technique can make up to 2000 shuriken shadow clones, and steer them efficiently.




13.)
Type: Ninjutsu
Nature: Fire
Rank: B
Class: Offensive, Collaborative
Name: Fire Release: Intelligent Hard Work
Description: The user spits out a small fireball that erupts into a giant firestorm after making contact with a surface, causing widespread destruction to the area. Since the flames travel along the ground, and from such a wide area this is a difficult technique to evade. The effect of this technique can be increased greatly by combining it with a Wind Release technique like Wind Release: Pressure Damage, which is strong enough to evaporate water.
Perquisite(s): --
Limitations: This technique can be used every 2-posts.
User(s): Matsuda Shingen, and any more experienced Fire Release user is capable of using this technique.

14.)
Type: Fuinjutsu
Nature: --
Rank: A
Class: Supplementary
Name: Five Elements Seal
Description: This jutsu produces a powerful seal that is used to block or disturb the flow of chakra in a target. Once the seal is completed, the target will become unconscious and unable to fight for a short time. Orochimaru performed this jutsu to tamper with the seal on the Nine-Tailed Demon Fox. The original seal allowed the Nine-Tails' chakra to seep out into Naruto Uzumaki, but the additional seal disturbs this, preventing Naruto from using the Nine-Tails' chakra or even controlling his own chakra properly. This is because an odd-numbered seal creates an imbalance when placed on top of an even-numbered seal. When Orochimaru later notices that the seal has been removed, he remarks that there are very few ninja capable of doing so.
Perquisite(s): There must be physical contact for this technique to work effectively.
Limitations: This technique seals the target's chakra for 6 posts, not allowing them to channel their chakra at all. If used in other circumstances outside of battle it can be long-lasting if the target so chooses it to be.
User(s): Often Sages, and very high-leveled Ninja have the experience, and knowledge to use this sort of seal.

15.)
Type: Fuinjutsu
Nature: --
Rank: A
Class: Supplementary
Name: Five Elements Unseal
Description: This jutsu is used to remove seals of up to equal power, like the Five Elements Seal. It is also capable of forcing the target to release higher amounts of chakra in battle making the target lose control over his/her techniques.
Perquisite(s): There must be physical contact for this Seal to work effectively.
Limitations: This overflow of Chakra in battle lasts up to 6 posts, but, if used in other circumstances outside of battle it can be long-lasting if the target so chooses it to be, and will often be used to simply remove other Fuinjutsu from the target.
User(s): Often Sages, and very high-leveled Ninja have the experience, and knowledge to use this sort of seal.

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Type: Taijutsu
Nature: None
Rank: D
Class: Offensive
Name: Dynamic Entry
Description: This jutsu simply appears to be a flying jump kick, often performed on the face of an enemy, while dramatically screaming the words "Dynamic Entry".
Limitations:

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Name:1ST GATE
Rank:A
Element:N/A
Description:1. The Gate of Opening (開門, Kaimon), located in the brain. Removes the restraints of the brain. Unlocking this gate allows the user to use the Front Lotus.


Name:2ND GATE
Rank:A
Element:N/A
Description:The Gate of Healing (休門, Kyūmon; English TV "The Gate of Rest"), located in the brain. Forcibly increases one's physical strength and temporary re-energizes the body.
Limitation:Once every thread


Name: Kokuangyo no Jutsu (Bringer-of-Darkness Technique)
Rank: A
Description:
This jutsu makes the target think that they are surrounded by total darkness, allowing the user to attack unseen. In the anime, the Second Hokage was the one to initiate this technique. In the manga, it was the First Hokage.
Limitaions:Once every thread, And it last 3 post

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Name: Katon: Hōsenka no Jutsu (Fire Release: Phoenix Flower Technique)
Rank: Chuunin
Element: Katon
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: The user performs handseals. This technique creates small fireballs, which are spat out of the user's mouth, flying wildly in every direction and assaulting the enemy. In addition, the flames are controlled one by one with chakra, so avoiding them all is extremely, difficult. Shuriken can be hid within the flames, creating an unexpected secondary surprise attack. Like the flames they can be controlled with chakra. For the most part, however, this technique is used as a distraction.

Name: Katon: Gōryūka no Jutsu (Fire Style: Great Dragon Flame Jutsu)
Rank: Chuunin
Element: Fire
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: The user compresses a large amount of chakra built up inside their body and changes its shape into a dragon-shaped fireball. The user then skillfully manipulates that great fire, and attacks their opponent. Even outside of the attack range, its power and reliability are stressed. The flames have a high temperature, as they can create an updraught which in turn can give rise to thunder clouds. A master of this technique can fire off several flames in succession. Anyone caught in the technique could potentially be reduced to ashes. different projectiles like shuriken or kunai.


Additional Jutsu

(Any jutsu that you create, or that your character has learned will be moved here. This only applies to those jutsu you've created, or learned AFTER your character application was approved. Only Administrators have the power to add the Jutsu you've created, or that you've learned to this section of the character app. You will leave this portion of the app. blank to start with.)

Arsenal

Ninja Tools:x16 Shuriken
x4 Kunai
x2 Smoke Bombs
x12 Exploding Tags


Primary Weapon:Katana

Secondary Weapon:Katana

Biography & RP-Sample

Biography:When Kazuki was a little boy nobody liked him because of how he would act sometime's.Kazukiwould get lost all the time even though his sense of direction was very good,His older sister would be the one who found him always.When kazuki was 5 his parents where killed by sound ninja in front of him.Kazuki tried to stop them but he was only a little boy and wasn't that strong.Kazuki was then made to stay with his sister.Kazuki trained eye's day to try and become stronger so that he would be able to protect anybody that he loved.

Kazuki stayed with his sister until the age of 12 that's when he got his own place.Kazuki enrolled in the academy where he was always lazy and barely did work but he did enough to pass the class.Kazuki then had a graduation party and became a Genin.Kazukiwent on plenty of mission as a genin,he always seem to be a better leader than the Jounin in charge.One day while Suzuki was walking down the street he a sighn that said there was an empty spot open for the hokage in the village,so Kazuki though this would be a good chance for him to become a leader and show of his leader ship skill's.

Kazuki read the sign and went to where it was at,when he got there he saw that it was about 10 people there 5 girls and 5 guys going for the spot excluding Kazuki.He thought why wouldn't more people go and try out for the empty spot but then the thought came to mind maybe people was scared about being hokage and that their lives would be at risk every day and you would have a lot of responsiblites.Kazuki said to himself ''people who are scared are right to be scared Im a lil scared myself''.

Kazuki then walked in and saw a man starting on a stand and talking.The man said ''Today all you will be trying out for the position of hokage of the leaf village you all should be very scared and at the same time very excited,my name is Tamkido and I will be the judge of the fights you all will participate in.You all will have to pick a number out of this box I hold in my hand''.Everybod then pick out a number from the box.Kazuki had number 1,all the other number went from Kazuki having number 1 a girl number 2 and in that pattern.

Tamkido then showed us a piece of paper telling us who we where going to fight aginst.Kazuki had to fight a man named Tamachi.Their match was immediately after everyone knew who they where going to fight.Kazuki was giving the first attack since Kazuki main weapon was his sword thats what he used,he charge at the man before jumping in the air and coming down with his sword.Tamachi blocked it with his kunai and then kicked Kazuki in the stomach which sent him hurling to the ground.

Tamachi said''Why the hell is somebody as weak as you going out for a position like that your only going to end up getting your self hurt or worse dead you should just quite now and let somebody stronger go on ahead''.Kazuki was very mad at what the man had said to him,that mad and fell weak then it made kazuki head have flash back of his brothers being dead in their home.Kazuki then passed out,Tamachi then smile and said''ha I knew he was weak this was easier than I thought it would be''.

Kazuki was very mad at what he had said and from that point on Kazuki was beating the man and Finnaly won the match. Kazuki then beat everybody else and became Hokage.


RP-Sample:It was the day after he had graduated. He was finally a Genin, but still had a lot to learn. He made his way back to his home during the day to tell his parents. His house was empty with a small note. We will be back tonight. That is all there was to the note. No explanation, no time, no real anything. He sighed and made his way to his room. His thoughts flowed to the whereabouts of his sisters, but quickly vanished. He was tired and now was the only time he could rest.The sun finally went down when he woke; the wind blew gently outside his window. He stretched a bit before rising out of his bed. He moved back into the main room of his home. Still his parents hadn’t returned. A quick look of worry crossed his face, but quickly vanished. ‘They will be back.’ The thought crossed his mind quickly as he got a drink of water.He drank slowly, while staring out at the village. The calm wind made everything seem peaceful and calm. It was like the village wasn’t active at night, like all the weapons were locked away in their homes. At least that was what he thought. The sound made him jump as he heard a bang outside his door. ‘What the….’ His thoughts raced as his right hand made its way to in front of his nose, his mind and chakra already setting for an attack. A quick movement outside the window made his hand drop. It was his father and he was hurt…badly.Fear shot through his face as he made his way to the door. “Son.” The words were weak and hardly audible over the wind. Kazuki made his way quickly to his father’s side and studied the wounds. His father was bleeding to death right in front of him. His hands shot to the wounds and slowly he tried to heal them. After about 5 minutes he thought he was done. His eyes scanned the wounds again and the blood was still coming. What had he done wrong? Why wasn’t the blood stopping? Again he tried and again the wounds did not stop.He was about to try again, but a hand stopped him. “You didn’t pay attention did you?” Kazuki’s eyes shot to his fathers and the image was burned. His father’s face was filled with disappointment, resentment, and the one that hurt the most…hatred. There was full out hatred for his son who now was going to let him die because of his ignorance. Because he didn’t study hard enough, didn’t learn enough and for that it was his father’s life. Failure was what Marid was now at this point. A complete and total failure to his family’s name.His father’s grip tightened and he pushed Kazuki away. “Go! Before it comes.” Rein’s eyes went wide as the hatred was now visible by the light of his home. There was hatred and pain in his father’s eyes. Anger flushed through Kazuki’s body. At himself and the thing who had done this. He ran to his father’s side and wrapped his arms around him. “Father I am sorry.” He whispered tears flowing from his eyes.A sound in the bushes made his father jump. “ go!” His eyes scanned the darkness as he tried to sit up. Kazuki’s arms wrapped tighter around his father. “No father you can’t die. I won’t let you.” The tears began to flow harder as he squeezed his father. “No dad!” His face was grabbed by two weak hands and he was face to face with his father. “Tears are not for ninja. You should know this by now, so why do you cry? You are a failure to me Kazuki. It’s a shame I have to die in such a presence.” Those were the last words his father would ever speak. A sharp beam of chakra came and hit him dead in the throat. His hands dropped and his eyes went blank. His body dropped to the ground with a soft thud. That was the end of his father.
Kazuki’s eyes widened at the words that had been spoken. His father had just told him he was a failure, not to himself, but to his whole family. The blood from his father’s throat splattered on his face. Anger now replaced the sadness that was inside of him. Anger, hatred, regret, pain, disgrace, contempt, and failure all rushed through his body at once. All those emotions shot at his thoughts. They screamed in his mind almost taunting him.The owner of this chakra stepped out of the darkness and laughed. “Well I finally got him.” The joy in the voice made Kazuki’s stomach sick. “And what do I have here? A child ninja crying over his father.” The laughter was sick and twisted as a crane with four tails made his way over to Kazuki. “Are you sad little one?” A sharp pain crossed through Kazuki’s stomach as the words were spoken. “I asked you a question child.” More pain shot across Kazuki’s body. “Come on let’s have fun with this one.” "I'm taking that his man I kill is your father." The tailed craned laughed one more time at the hopeless Kazuki.Five minutes. Five minutes of pure pain and torture. Five minutes of blows that should have knocked him out. Five minutes of pure hell. The four tails laughed and kept making sneering comment. “Still awake huh? Well maybe I should take you out like your father then.” It laughed again as only two tails were drawn. “Should I kill you fast or slow huh?” More laughter left it's throat as it joked about how to kill the child.Kazuki’s body ached. Everything about him hurt. There was nothing left for him. He had lost his father. He had shamed his family. There was nothing left for any ninja after that. ‘At least I can die with honor.’ This thought crossed his mind as he watched the four tails. His eyes glanced over to where his father laid dead, his blood soaking into the sand. Kazuki’s anger returned as he scanned his father’s corpse. His hatred grew within him. His hands moved and he pushed himself up weakly, his eyes staring at his feet, tears flowing from his eyes. “I will kill you.” His words were soft, but loud enough for the bijuu to hear.The four tails bijuu looked at him and laughed loudly. “Oh did I hear that correctly? You're is going to kill me.” The third and fourt tail stood up with the first two. “Oh no I must retreat.” Again it laughed in greif looking at Kazuki. “Ok you little s***. Its time for you to die.” It viciously charged Kazuki. The chakra of the bijuu aimed for his throat.Kazuki’s head slowly raised and his hand was already set. “BURN IN HELL!” The rage left his body and the four talis stopped instantly. Kazuki’s chakra flowed uncontrollably out of his body. The four tails looked in a daze. It's faces twisted in pain and blood began to flow from it's mouths.
This technique was like no other. One that even Kazuki couldn’t explain. It was genjutsu mixed with medical ninjutsu and ninjutsu alike. His chakra seemed to shoot out at his opponent while it was in a dazed trance. It spread through it's body like a sick virus destroying everything it touched. The pain was excruciating both to him and the bijuu. His chakra flowed around every cell of their body. Unlike healing jutsu this jutsu destroyed everything. It took the structure of the cell and imploded it. Simply just making the body collapse within itself.Two minutes. Two minutes passed and the four tails was dead. Kazuki’s body gave out and he fell to the ground. The wind picked up, as he lay there completely drained of chakra. ‘Father I did it.’ The thought crossed his mind before he blacked out. A ninja from his village happened to be passing by. He saw the young boy and the two corpses. He moved quickly to the boy and took him inside his home and laid him down on his bed. He left quickly and silently and went to report what he saw to the Hokage.Two Days Later.The sun splashed across the window onto Kazuki’s face. This startled him and he shot up looking around. His mind quickly went over what had just happened the night before. Or he thought it was the night before. He went to jump out of bed, but was held down by the sharp pain that had shot through his body. He flinched in pain then moved again with more caution.The village was buzzing and people filled the streets. The two corpses had already been moved from where they were.Kazuki looked and shook his head. Was it a dream? Had he dreamed all of this had happened? The sharp pain that shot through his body told him other wise. He turned and then saw the note in the same place it had been. That’s when he knew it wasn’t a dream. The Note Read Dear, Kazuki this is your Kage speaking. If you reading this letter then it means that I didn't make it. If your not clear of what I'm talking about I performed a jutsu upon you to seal the 4 tailed within you. I can only hope that you use this 4 tailed power to bring peace and tranquility to this world. As your Kage this is my wish. Please do this for me Rein for everyone in village and the shinobi world is depending on you. Please, I repeat. Please do not fail me as my future successor. I believe in you. He went and got ready slowly trying not to injure himself anymore. His first plan was to go to the health facility and get fixed up. A sigh left his throat as he made it out into the busy streets. Quickly he made it to the facility and was treated. Everything for him was back to normal. A smile crossed his face as he made his way back home. Would he report what had happened? He knew he should, but what was the point. There was no evidence that anythingever been there. The only thing he had that he could remember clearly was his father’s face. The look of shame that his father wore before he died.Another thought crossed his mind as well. The look of the bijuu's face just before it died. This thought shot through his mind and was just as clear as his father’s face. His mind raced around trying to figure out the jutsu he had used. It had to be powerful to knock him out for two days. After about ten minutes of thinking about it, he finally just gave up. Whatever he had done he would learn how to do it again sooner or later. He nodded and then got a drink of water.As he drank it his father’s face crossed his mind again. Pain shot through his body as he remembered the look exactly. He knew that it was his fault his father died. It was his fault for not paying attention and becoming as strong as he could be. Shame shot through him, but he ignored it. He knew what he had to do now. He had to earn his honor back by becoming the best. That meant he had a lot of training to do. With that a smile crossed his face. He had to train his butt off before his Jounin was chosen. Only then could he prove to his father he was worth his time. He finished his water and nodded his head. And so his goal was set, his promise, his only destination, to be the best. With that he headed off toward the gate to train and begin his long journey.


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Affiliation: Kirigakure
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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Thu Jul 15, 2010 7:06 pm

1) Members are not allowed to start with their own, made up Kekkei Genkai. You need Administrative permission, and I do not approve of this Kekkei Genkai that allows you to break out of any Genjutsu without fail. That's definitely over-powering.

2) You only use Fire and Lightning therefore you shouldn't have Water Clones or any other Water Release technique.

3) Your limit for Five Elements Seal should be 6, not 8.

4) Each of the Eight Gates count as Jutsu in themselves, and you need the first gates, before unlocking the rest, so, make sure you edit it. Also, Taijutsu, or Nintaijutsu should be your specialization if you have this technique.

5) Your Bringer-of-Darkness Technique needs a duration, for how long it lasts on a target.

6) You cannot have any Medical Ninjutsu, unless you specialize in Medical Ninjutsu.

Once these things are dealt with, I'll take another look at your app.

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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Fri Jul 16, 2010 4:23 pm

BUMB I fixed the problems
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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Sat Jul 17, 2010 3:32 pm

1) You'll need to be older then 19, I mean, that is pretty young for Kage rank.

2) Muon Satsujin Jutsu and Katon: Hotama no Jutsu need to follow the Jutsu template available to you on every app. All I see is the description, and what rank they are. In order to be complete you must follow the template for the jutsu.

3) The Eight Gates are Jutsu in themselves. The 1st gate is an individual technique, and the rest are individual.

4) You need to limit to how many clones you can use at once 1-15, and a duration for them.

Alright, I'll take another look once these changes are made.



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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Sat Jul 17, 2010 4:32 pm

1) 15 each post for your Clones? That's quite a lot. You need to put a duration down for how long these Shadow Clones last. Reasonably you should be able to make 1-15 shadow clones in one thread (not post) and they should have a duration for how long they're out.

2) Ok, you can only start with 20 Jutsu. You've counted the 1st-4th Gates as one technique, and 5th-8th gate as another Jutsu... Each should be a jutsu in itself. Separate from one another. Altogether, they should make 8 different jutsu, you can only start with 20, so, you'll need to edit the jutsu accordingly.

Once your app. is edited again, I'll take yet another look.

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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Sat Jul 17, 2010 6:04 pm

Well, I noticed you removed all the Eight Gates except the first one... Well, I also noticed you still had the Eight Gates as a technique, each Gate is a separate technique.

Remove the Eight Gates Technique, and leave the 1st Gate as a technique (perhaps add the 2nd gate as well)

Once that is done, I'll be able to approve this app. (as far as I can see anyways)

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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Sat Jul 17, 2010 6:33 pm

Done at last
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PostSubject: Re: Kazuki Namaki   Sat Jul 17, 2010 6:35 pm

Alright.

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